My cold life has taken a turn
for the worst
with the cold fire my soul will burn
in a hearse

My cold heart is stealin away
what little i have to offer
my love is drippin away
from my emotional coffer

(chorus)
Help me, now help me with your enchanting love
my guardian angel, she destroys me from above
your presence melts the frost
behind which my heart will hide
now help me melt, the glacier inside.

my heart, from its frozen state, its almost free
your leaving! why do you do this to me
was it your love that was all a lie
why do you do this you leave me to die

(instrumental)

chorus

Wow the chorus is great! I realluy like it ^-^ However in my opinion the first set of lyrics needs a little bit of modification ^-^ Its not bad at all though, its really good, it takes me forever to get any ryhms (thats why, i write free verse!!).

My suggestion is to find a new way to express your feelings in the lyrics, howveer keep the chorus the same, i really liked that ^-^ Keep in mind, unique is original and attractive

Did you write that? If you did that's cool!

heck I like it as is, if thats is your own work then you sir are quite the talented lyric writer

I like it.It's quite nice.:)

Everyone agrees then it is a great song. Is it rock or pop or well, what does it sound like (I think that's what I'm trying to say)? Did you write this for a band or was it just for your own pleasure?

omg my mak is it not enought taht it is on the website but it has to be here. geez guys this guy along with me are from a band that wrotwe this song. the band is called Soul Thieves and mak here is our bassest, and im vocals. we have a website and heres the url to it:
s11.invisionfree.com/Soul_Thieves/index.php
go check it out we have a lot of good stuff there but back to the song... its a good song i also like the corus the best .